The present

In the past weeks our class (Ako Ngatahi) were writing a short story about a video titled “The Present”. It was a story about a boy who got a present and it was a puppy. After he discovered that the puppy only had three legs.

Here is the video

“The Present”

W.A.L.T: Write a narrative

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when….

• The title is suitable for the text.

• The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
• The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.

The Present

One sunny day I was playing on my PS4 game, Lego Avengers. I shut the blinds so I could see better. When my mum came back from work she came in with a box. Mum opened the blinds and I couldn't see, but I didn’t fail on my game so I kept on playing. Mum said “Start opening the present”.  I said “For me?” and I started smiling. So I opened the box and it was a puppy. I said “Wow!” I felt really happy.  Then I looked at the dog's broken leg and I felt disgusted and threw him on the ground. I felt so mad that mum gave me a puppy with a disabled leg.

The puppy came up to me and I kicked him and shook my head and kept playing. He was upside down and saw a red ball under the cupboard. He ran into the cupboard. Then he tried again and went under and grabbed the ball. He kicked the ball to me and I kicked it away. It went in the box. The puppy ran to the ball and was trapped in the box. I started to like the puppy and thought we could be friends because I had a disabled leg too.

I grabbed the ball and grabbed my crutches and went outside to play ball with the puppy. It’s good to have a friend like me.